{"id":8556,"date":"2023-05-06T07:11:00","date_gmt":"2023-05-06T11:11:00","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/tenfootpole.org\/ironspike\/?p=8556"},"modified":"2023-04-24T09:37:43","modified_gmt":"2023-04-24T13:37:43","slug":"the-tomb-of-the-ashen-queen","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/tenfootpole.org\/ironspike\/?p=8556","title":{"rendered":"The Tomb of the Ashen Queen"},"content":{"rendered":"\n
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by Luiz Eduardo Ricon\nHexplore Publishing\nOSE\nLevel 1<\/pre>\n\n\n\n
In centuries past, these lands were raided by a merciless warrior queen. Her name is legend, and the location of her final repose was a long, lost secret\u2026 until now!<\/p>\n\n\n\n
This 26 page digest adventure uses eight pages to describe twelve rooms in a dungeon. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
This is marketed as the perfect first dungeon crawl for starting players. It is important, as with all things, to not believe anything you ever read. This is not the perfect first dungeon crawl for starting players. This is a total and absolute piece of garbage of an adventure. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
Our first sign is that it\u2019s twenty six pages. And only uses nine of them to describe its twelve rooms. I guess it could be worse. It could use even more pages to describe the rooms. It doesn\u2019t matter. Nothing matters. Anymore. Ever. Because some beaming idiot is always there, holding out the lumpy ashtray they just made. This is life.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
Need another example? How about the map! A pretty basic affair. Just a bunch of rectangles connected by corridors in the most \u201cI made this in powerpoint\u201d kind of way. With a couple of same-level stairs thrown in. But, of, no, this is not the highlight of the map. Oh no. The highlight is that the fucking map doesnt use numbers. Yes, friends, our ashtray is convex. The map just has room names. Exciting names like \u201cOrcs\u201d or \u201cGoblins\u201d or \u201cMess Hall.\u201d It\u2019s up to us, the DM\u2019s of the world, to dig through the text and find the room that says \u201cGoblins.\u201d I wonder if the \u201cgoblins\u201d rooms comes before or after the \u201cOrcs\u201d room in the text? SHould I page further on to find it or should I turn back a few pages? If only there was some simple way to determine that! Something, like, I don\u2019t know, an ordered system of keys. Like, I don\u2019t number, what if we used numbers? So, like \u201cRoom 2\u201d or something. Then, if we\u2019re looking at Room 1 in the text we know that Room 2 should be the next room. That would make sense! Oh, what\u2019s that? This text kind of does that? Yes! It does! \u201cRoom 1, Antechamber\u201d That\u2019s great! But, YOU DIDN\u201dT PUT ThE FUCKING ON FUCKING  THE MAP IN THIS PIECE OF SHIT FUCKING PRODUCT! And, you named the fucking rooms something else. Is the \u201cGoblins\u201d room on the map the same as \u201cRoom 2 Goblins Attack\u201d room in the text? Fuck it. You EXPECT the stoplights to be times?! You EXPECT the road to not be full of potholes?! You EXPECT COmcast customer service to provide customer service?! Fuuuuuuuccccccckkkkkkkk You! Wait at the restaurant for them to microwave your frozen ravioli. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
Ah, but the adventure! There we have something! Lets\u2019 look at these amazing room descriptions! \u201cThe walls have 4 torch sconces, with burned out torches. Three doors leading out.\u201d How\u2019s THAT for a description, Mr Reviewerman?! No? Not your cup of tea? Then how about \u201cThis room is torch lit, 60×60, one locked door on the North wall. There\u2019s a pedestal with a silver amulet on the east wall\u201d Ha! Take that! I loathe my life. I yearn, only, for escape from it. And, yet, this is what I\u2019m presented with, every day, in every way. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
Room two tells that that there is a noise and a light coming from beyond the corridor turn. That\u2019s from the perspective of room one, so, I hope you entered the room that way. And, of course, this should have been the description of the room one exit to that direction. This is basic fucking shit. And, I know the hooks are dismissed by many of you, but, they are included. Such things as \u201cYou came here on a caravan.\u201d Great. Or \u201cyou found a map in a chest.\u201d This is indeed making my life better, thanks for including that.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
There is one nice thing in this adventure. Room one has dirt all over the floor and an inscription on the floor under it. Nice detail, that.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
Look, I\u2019m kind of known for being a generous kind of guy, so I\u2019ll offer this advice for everyone out there who wants to write an adventure and publish it. I\u2019m going to assume you are writing for the joy of it. You\u2019re not one of those commercial hacks that have a Patreon and are dumping out content to your subscribers every month. There\u2019s nothing wrong with a Patreon, but, there is something wrong with pumping out shitty content in order to make money. At least  there is within the context of this blog. They can be lauded on the \u201cCapitalism: How to Find A Sucker\u201d blog. But not here. Here we\u2019re looking for quality. Here we\u2019re in it for the love of D&D. So, let me ask you, Wannabe Adventure Writer \u2026<\/p>\n\n\n\n
Is this the best thing you have done or will ever do in your life? If you could only be known for one thing from now until the end of time, is this it? That adventure you just write and about to publish \u2026 is that it? When you are judged before god, or talked about by your sons and daughters or mentioned in media a thousand years from now, will they be holding up this adventure as the only example from your entire meaningless fucking worthless existance and saying \u201cYes. THIS is it\u201d! If you cannot contemplate this being the best thing you have written, or will ever write \u2026 then don\u2019t publish it. Don\u2019t inflict it upon the rest of us.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
Thing about why you\u2019re writing it. You\u2019re not getting rich. No makes money at this shit. We already covered the Patreon\/ConveyerBelt crowd. They make bank. But they aren\u2019t doing it because they love D&D. They are just churning out content every month to make money with no expectation of quality. So, when we remove the potential of making more than $20 from the equation \u2026 why are you doing this? Presumably because you are excited and you love the game and you want to share that. So do that. DO it in a way that communicates your excitement and vision. Agonize over it. Tear your hair and rend your clothing over the adventure. Over the writing. Over the design. Truly visit the depths of despair and the heights of joy as you work it. Over and over and over again. Produce for us a work that is the best that you can possibly achieve, and then go beyond that. Make something that you believe could honestly be mentioned in the same breathe as G1 or Thracia or DCO. That\u2019s the bar you are shooting for in publishing. Because that\u2019s what you actually want to do. Deep down, that\u2019s what you want and that\u2019s what you yearn for and that\u2019s what you envision in your head. So do it.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
This is $1 at DriveThru. The preview eight pages and you get to see none of the actual adventure, so it’s a failure also.<\/p>\n\n\n\n

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