{"id":6036,"date":"2019-06-08T07:12:58","date_gmt":"2019-06-08T11:12:58","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/tenfootpole.org\/ironspike\/?p=6036"},"modified":"2019-06-02T08:54:25","modified_gmt":"2019-06-02T12:54:25","slug":"5e-the-blacksmiths-burden","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/tenfootpole.org\/ironspike\/?p=6036","title":{"rendered":"(5e) The Blacksmith’s Burden"},"content":{"rendered":"\n
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By John Rossomangno\nSelf published\n5e\nLevels 2-4<\/pre>\n\n\n\n
When the party arrives in the small village of Goldendale they find a shortage of metal goods and a community upset with the lack of production. Despite their admiration for the village blacksmith, folks grow concerned about his inability to complete the simplest jobs even though they hear the ring of his hammer throughout the night\u2026<\/p>\n\n\n\n
This 24 page adventure has a small investigation in a village followed by a small goblin outpost and then a seven room goblin lair. IE: the usual. It merges seamlessly in to the great mass of adventure dreck, not knowing how to format an adventure while offering nothing unusual in way of adventure. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
The usual: a small investigation followed by a run in with the baddies and then a small lair. There must be about ninety bajillion adventures of this type published, as well as a significant number of home game adventures. I\u2019m not gonna rail on the adventure type, it is what it is, but if you want to publish something in this type then you need to do a little more. Why am I buying this adventure, from among all of the other choices I have? This don\u2019t do that. It makes the usual mistakes and ends up just being another also-ran.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
If the pillars of an adventure are usability, interactivity, and evocativeness then this fails to meet any of those standards. It\u2019s not actively promoting bad play, in as much as there is no forced morality, railroading, or other sins, but it\u2019s not actually engaging in anything good either. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
Usability: The village is described in paragraph long form with NPC quirks, investigation hints, and other data all mixed in to the general morass of text. Multiple paragraphs of text. Full of weasel words and padding, history, background and other things and commentary not relevant to the adventure. This obfuscates anything useful to the DM to actually running the adventure. Better formatting, focusing on a brief description, one or two sentences, and then key callouts of NPC traits and bullets for learned information, for example, would have been better. Or something like that. The specific style doesn\u2019t matter but what does is making it absolutely trivial for the DM to scan the text and locate pertinent information. You can\u2019t bog the DM down reading a great mass of text during actual play. And no, note taking and highlighting are not solutions. Those are crutches the DM has to engage in to make an adventure useful. If the DM has to do that then the designer should have done something to make it so the DM didn\u2019t have to do that. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
Likewise we see sections of text in maroon italics, as the default style of the time, that make it hard to read. Yeah, I know those fucking templates from DMSGuild make it easy for an adventure to APPEAR professional. But they stink from a usability standpoint. No fucking italics in read-aloud! (See, I didn\u2019t even bitch that the read-aloud is both too long and also boring, my usual gripes. \u2026 except that by bitching about not bitching about it I am in fact bitching about it.)<\/p>\n\n\n\n
Likewise we get dungeon rooms, in the actual lair, that follow a strict formatting guidelines. Thou shalt include a Developments\u201d heading, and a \u201cTreasure\u201d heading. And a \u201ccreature\u201d heading. Seven rooms in 24 pages, investigation or not, betrays an adventure with half-column or more stat blocks and an overly prescriptive layout\/format.  <\/p>\n\n\n\n
Which ends up being boring anyway. It\u2019s mostly just goblins running up to attack the party. That\u2019s exciting. Interactivity is not the exclusive domain of combat. If you want tactical mini\u2019s then go play Warhammer. Or Gloomhaven. Adventures need things to explore and interact with. And exploring does not mean walking down a hallway. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
Treasure: The implements on the workbench comprise a full set of alchemist’s supplies (worth 50gp). Although they are currently stored improperly, they can still be put to use in the right hands. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
So \u2026 scattered alchemist’s tools (50gp) is what you mean? And that\u2019s not even bitching about the abstraction of using the words \u201calchemist’s tools\u201d instead of noting beakers, braziers, reagents, tongs, delicate magnifying glasses and the like. Abstractions are boring while details are the soul of storytelling and imagery. Of which this adventure misses the mark again and again. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
On the plus side the adventure does let you get information out of someone without rolling dice. \u201cEither through roleplay or skill checks.\u201d That\u2019s a miracle. There\u2019s also a hook where you find clues in a previous adventure: a kobold lair you were to investigate is found wiped out, broken weapons and spearpoints bearing the mark of the blacksmith in this village \u2026 sup with that? Note the detail of his mark, and broken weapons, and the \u201csurprise\u201d of your adventure with the kobolds not being a kobold adventure. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
I\u2019m being a tad overly harsh in this review. This dude is doing nothing that the great mass of adventure designers don\u2019t do. The fact that they nearly ALL do it wrong shouldn\u2019t be this guys fault. He\u2019s clearly got an inkling of what D&D is supposed to be, with this \u201cyou can use roleplay\u201d comment. And like most he simply has not been exposed to, or understands, good adventure formatting. No real railroads, just as there is no real order of battle for the goblin reaction. No real forced morality ot failed novelist text, just as the writing is note particularly evocative or the dungeon interactive. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
Get your usability down. Then focus on an interactive adventure. Then focus on evocative text (which I think is the hardest task.) Finally, edit it till your fingers bleed to ensure its usable, nteractive, and evocative.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
This is $4 on DriveThru. The preview is only two pages long and doesn\u2019t really show you anything of what you are buying, so it\u2019s a bad preview. At most, it shows the use of paragraph style formatting as the primary means to convey information; you\u2019d have to extrapolate to figure out the rest of the adventure is like this. It also has the kobold lair hook, which is kind of interesting to see alongside the more typical boring\/crap hooks.<\/p>\n\n\n\n

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