{"id":6015,"date":"2019-05-22T07:16:58","date_gmt":"2019-05-22T11:16:58","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/tenfootpole.org\/ironspike\/?p=6015"},"modified":"2019-05-19T10:19:05","modified_gmt":"2019-05-19T14:19:05","slug":"aa-42-dead-in-the-water","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/tenfootpole.org\/ironspike\/?p=6015","title":{"rendered":"AA #42 – Dead in the Water"},"content":{"rendered":"\n
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By Lang Waters\nExpeditious Retreat Press\nOSRIC\nLevels 3-5<\/pre>\n\n\n\n
You crack your eyes open, surprised to be alive after the sudden storm. What was it that woke you? The hot sun? The stillness ringing in your ears? Bruised, you disentangle yourself from rope and debris on the deck and pull yourself up on the rail. You peer out across a sailor\u2019s nightmare\u2014a sea of glass. Not a ripple in the water as far as the eye can see. Not a whisper of wind touches the sails. You\u2019ve heard stories of ships becalmed for weeks, throwing horses overboard to lighten the load and conserve water. You remember stories of starvation and cannibalism. You see other ships in the distance listing, torn and low in the water. Old. Dead. And you are too…dead, in the water.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
This sixteen page adventure details a ship graveyard political situation, with several factions. Becalmed, the party needs to find a way out. It\u2019s an interesting environment with plenty going on. It also suffers from layout and editing issues that make extensive prep a requirement. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
After a storm the party is trapped in a ship graveyard, an area becalmed. Six-ish fellow ships are there also, in various conditions. One has four survivors, desperate for food, water, and escape. There\u2019s also a \u201csand-man\u201d in a steamship scooting about the area salvaging parts, and an evil sorceress (as Hag) who wants the sand-man dead and causes the storms\/becalming. Finally, there a tribe of locath unda da sea who want to be mostly left alone. Oh, and the hags lacedons swim around in packs in certain areas. And the other ships are essentially mini-dungeons full of resources and hazards. And under the sea is giant octopus, ruined city, an abysmal depth with a ship about to slide in to it, and a few other goodies. Finally, there\u2019s a timeline to drive some action.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
You get all that going on? That\u2019s how you write a fucking adventure. LOT\u2019S going on. Factions. Motivations. Timeline. Timer (food\/water in this case.) The motivations make sense, they appeal to understanding. The survivors sometime eat each other, dicing to see who goes next, but they collect their skulls with a solemn promise to bury them on land \u2026 desperate people doing desperate things to survive \u2026 but bound to each other. At the heart of this adventure is a great concept with lots of stellar components. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
That are poorly organized.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
If you are going to run this effectively then you are going to have to read it multiple times, spend some time with a highlighter and take a lots of notes. I don\u2019t believe that I, as a consumer, should have to do that. That\u2019s the job of the designer. If you, as a designer, choose to not do that then I\u2019m likely to spend my lucre\/time with something that does. There are about a billion adventures available these days and I don\u2019t need to settle. That comes off a little harsh, as if I\u2019m directing it at Lang personally; I\u2019m speaking generally about the hurdle the designer my pass these days.<\/p>\n\n\n\n
NPC descriptions are long, one taking up a column. In that specific case it turns in to a wall of text, everything running together with little to no whitespace or bolding to help. A couple of locations, such as the locath camp,. Are presented as a numbered site locale \u2026 room\/key format is great for exploratory dungeons but too strong of adherence to that format, in EVERY situation, is not called for. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
On and on the text goes, adhering to editing value that cause spells and magic items to be bolded but not important facts. Long long text blocks in Ye Olde Fonte Style that all runs together. This does NOT fall in to the sin of being an Adventure Novelization, the way many adventures do. It does, however, lean that way. And that MUST be the case when you emphasize long text blocks over usability at the table. <\/p>\n\n\n\n
The ship description for The Intrepid mentions a room 7 \u2026 that doesn\u2019t exist on the map. There\u2019s a journal on a body, and the last entry is about a mummy returning at night. And then there\u2019s stats for a mummy in the text. Uh, so, I do what\u2019s in the journal text? <\/p>\n\n\n\n
This needed a completely different layout and style. The factions laid out better. Summaries. The ships in a format that doesn\u2019t rely as heavily on room\/key for EVERYTHING. It has a good idea but my days of beating my head against an adventure wall in order to get it in to runnable shape are over. I wonder if, in this case, it was playtested by someone other than the designer and\/or what the notes were?<\/p>\n\n\n\n

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